2007-03-04 sanctuary1: that is pretty damn good. i like how you write. its really good. 2007-03-05 Jenna Rose: This is lovely :) 2007-03-06 Askoga: o.O That's what Mr. Saint said, but I *still* have trouble believe it's really that good. I just see *so* much room for improvement in this. 2007-03-06 Askoga: By the by, this is really, really not my usual writing style or subject. Yay for trying something new! 2007-03-08 kumquat: 2007-03-09 Askoga: Thank you! I'm glad you enjoyed it.[Askoga]: 89.Short Stories.Mature
Rating: 1.45
So entranced by her boundless beauty, I don't even notice her move, but suddenly my hand is captured, just at the curve of her hips. Ensnared by more than just her delicate hand, I watch as a smile blooms at the corners of her sensuous mouth. Her baby-blue eyes flutter open, assaulting me with the awesome wonder of her entire smile.
“G'morning,” I say distractedly, beginning to move my hand over her soft, silken skin, as she releases it again. I wonder, watching her lips curving with such grace, how I ever mistook other things for lovely before I saw her smile.
Her fingers brush my cheek, and then she raises her hand to run her fingers through my hair. Or so I think at first, having forgotten the gleam in her baby-blues. She pulls, ever so gently but insistently, my head lower, and my lips meet the startling velvet of hers. And in that moment all thought vanishes, like shadows before the sun.
Glad y'all like it, though!
:) I don't know what words
to use for this?
Pretty...not enough 'oomph'
Beautiful...I use that too much
Lovely...Doesn
Ooo it's just really nice Hon.
It made me smile.
Which is always lovely;
sometimes poets' are trying
so hard to force all their
demons out onto paper,
we forget to inject a little
joy into our writings from time
to time >.<
xxxlindenxxx